Revisions on 2 paragraphs

Setting:
In this scene there is a white candle lit that is illuminating a dark room. The candle is in a blue candle holder. The candle is on a brown table in a dark room. The wax that is dripping down the side of the candle is blood red even though the candle is white. There is a piece of string hanging horizontally above the candle. The string is ripping and tearing apart because the tip of the flame is burning all the fibers in the string. 

Plot:

Next to the table Carlos was hanging over a lake with alligators,  the rope above the candle is the only thing holding him up from death. Carlos was kidnapped by a very violent gang in South America called the Boodle Gang. They are known for kidnapping wealthy business owners and torturing them until they give the gang all of their money. They have never been caught because the bodies of the owners were never able to be found. The gang however made a huge mistake when kidnapping Carlos, because they did not know he used to be a professional alligator wrestler before opening his business. Carlos knew he would be able to escape from the alligators by wrestling them, so when the Boodle gang gave him one last chance to give them the money they wanted he stayed silent and waited until he fell into the lake. The Boodle gang left thinking that Carlos was or soon will die from the alligators. Carlos was able to wrestle and knock out all of the alligators before escaping down a small river that led out of the lake. When Carlos was able to get back to his home, he called the police and the Boodle gang was finally caught. Carlos was a hero in South America because this gang has been tormenting the entire continent of South America for the last 10 years.