Peer Review Questions

Group 1: Connor, Lili, Mia

1. What has this group done well?

Creating an interesting scene about murder from their lines.

2. What, if anything, is confusing about this scene?

How he got murdered or who he is.

3. Describe the emotion of the characters/plot.

Mia is motivated and annoyed because she just wants to bury the body but Lili is being lazy and mean and not helping her bury the body.

4. Describe the relationship between the characters.

They seem like life-long best friends because they just murdered someone together, and they are just having a casual argument while burying the body together.

5. What else could this group have done to improve?

Try to show what happened to the body or why he was killed.

Group 2: Logan, Patrick, Lowkey:

1. What has this group done well?

This group also did a great job creating an interesting scene with a son who was taken hostage.

2. What, if anything, is confusing about this scene?

What the kidnappers want from Logan's dad and why they kidnapped Logan.

3. Describe the emotion of the characters/plot.

Logan was sad because he was kidnapped and has a knife to his throat.

4. Describe the relationship between the characters.

A father and son, and a kidnapper who kidnapped the son.

5. What else could this group have done to improve?

Make the scene a little more clear because although the characters were in 2 different places the table was still very close, and they seemed like they were in the same room.

Group 3: Noah+Daylin:

1. What has this group done well?

Noah did really well acting out a drunk person, he did very well physically and emotionally.

2. What, if anything, is confusing about this scene?

I am confused what is actually going on and why they are arguing.

3. Describe the emotion of the characters/plot.

The emotion of the scene is anger and drunk arguing

4. Describe the relationship between the characters.

They seemed like partners or friends, I'm not really sure.

5. What else could this group have done to improve?

Daylin could improve his eye contact and project his voice better, he is very quiet.

Group 4: Tony+Amy:

1. What has this group done well?

Tony did a very good job of acting nervous.

2. What, if anything, is confusing about this scene?

Confusing who they are stealing from and why.

3. Describe the emotion of the characters/plot.

One character was very nervous about the robbery while the other one was motivating him and making sure he wasn't nervous.

4. Describe the relationship between the characters.

Working buddies/robbery friends.

5. What else could this group have done to improve?

They could improve by talking a little slower and louder.

41 Questions

Ryan, Connor, Daylin:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1MMrfhKKLeZZIDlqwkdx7dDu1VSqJy5qFR2atSDY_bWQ/edit

In class writing

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1-0r7PqbAWsIHDBLbnL5z2nVSqNVzqNGxiFjCTHWEp-M/edit

Revisions on 2 paragraphs

Setting:
In this scene there is a white candle lit that is illuminating a dark room. The candle is in a blue candle holder. The candle is on a brown table in a dark room. The wax that is dripping down the side of the candle is blood red even though the candle is white. There is a piece of string hanging horizontally above the candle. The string is ripping and tearing apart because the tip of the flame is burning all the fibers in the string. 

Plot:

Next to the table Carlos was hanging over a lake with alligators,  the rope above the candle is the only thing holding him up from death. Carlos was kidnapped by a very violent gang in South America called the Boodle Gang. They are known for kidnapping wealthy business owners and torturing them until they give the gang all of their money. They have never been caught because the bodies of the owners were never able to be found. The gang however made a huge mistake when kidnapping Carlos, because they did not know he used to be a professional alligator wrestler before opening his business. Carlos knew he would be able to escape from the alligators by wrestling them, so when the Boodle gang gave him one last chance to give them the money they wanted he stayed silent and waited until he fell into the lake. The Boodle gang left thinking that Carlos was or soon will die from the alligators. Carlos was able to wrestle and knock out all of the alligators before escaping down a small river that led out of the lake. When Carlos was able to get back to his home, he called the police and the Boodle gang was finally caught. Carlos was a hero in South America because this gang has been tormenting the entire continent of South America for the last 10 years.

In Class Writing 2 paragraphs

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Rope being burned/ripped apart
- Blood
- Candle
- Fire
- Burning
- Blue candle holder
- Brown table
- Smells burnt
- Dark Back ground
- The candle is in a dark room
- White
- Red
- Blue
- Brown
Setting:
In this scene there is a white candle lit that is illuminating a dark room. The candle is in a blue candle holder. The candle is on a brown table in a dark room. The wax that is dripping down the side of the candle is blood red even though the candle is white. There is a piece of string hanging horizontally above the candle. The rope is ripped because the tip of the flame is shredding the rope.

Plot:

Next to the table Carlos was hanging over a lake with alligators,  the rope above the candle is the only thing holding him up from death. Carlos was kidnapped by a very violent gang in South America called the Boodle Gang. They are known for kidnapping wealthy business owners and torturing them until they give the gang all of their money. The gang however made a huge mistake when kidnapping Carlos, because they did not know he used to be a professional alligator wrestler before opening his business. Carlos knew he would be able to escape from the alligators by wrestling them, so when the Boodle gang gave him one last chance to give them the money they wanted he stayed silent and waited until he fell into the lake.  Carlos was able to wrestle and knock out all of the alligators before escaping down a small river that led out of the lake.